Comments on: Chapped Excerpt Second Week

By: Grey

Grey — Wed, 16 Dec 2009 04:17:39 +0000

great article ! i love it .. Thank for this.

By: Livvy Lu

Livvy Lu — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 23:48:45 +0000

Looks good! I’m so proud of ya…I can’t imagine writing that much on the same storyline. I think I’d run outta words…do you think that’s possible??!?

Big hugs!

By: @ngie

@ngie — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 01:09:42 +0000

That is a very intriguing blurb you’ve got, Beck’. I love that we are doing this together. It adds a very cool dimension to the experience. I hear you on the word count thing. There have been so many sentences that I think are cheesy or repetitive, but I leave ‘em just to keep my fingers moving. Scrutinizing comes later.

By: Becky

Becky — Wed, 18 Nov 2009 00:51:20 +0000

Angie, you’re doing great! Sounds like an interesting story.

Great tip from Marti too. But save that editing for later. I admit that sometimes I purposely use more words than necessary during NaNoWriMo just to get my word count up!

I haven’t put up any excerpts yet. Just a tiny blurb on my NaNo page.

By: @ngie

@ngie — Tue, 17 Nov 2009 13:26:14 +0000

Hi Lynn! Thanks for the encouragement. That word looked so wrong to me but I didn’t want to take the time to figure out how to fix it. Now my problem is solved. Good eye, lady! )

By: Lynn

Lynn — Tue, 17 Nov 2009 13:18:38 +0000

Interesting! Way to go on your goal. I hope that you make it and are happy with the end result. It looks good so far. Just one question. Does the devil pray or does he prey? You may have meant prayed but maybe you meant preyed. Could have been a literay creative expression too and I just missed it.
Congrats too on climbing your mountain. Which we had snow capped ones here in Turkana .

By: @ngie

@ngie — Tue, 17 Nov 2009 10:19:52 +0000

Oh, yes! Good tip, thank you. I was getting bored with how many times I included phrases like that, but I didn’t know how to fix it. I do think you are on to something. How exciting!

By: Marti

Marti — Tue, 17 Nov 2009 05:03:46 +0000

Hmmmm…. curious about the mother-daughter relationship! Good characterization. “We can’t leave your father alone, now, can we?”

Here’s an editing trick that will cost you some words but tighten up your writing. Eliminate almost all the “she thought/reasoned/mused” statements. Just say what she’s thinking without saying she’s thinking it. Makes the prose just a bit stronger.